Come Back Little Girl

Come back little girl,
Come back to me.
I was wrong to hurt you.
What was I thinking?

^^ This is a nice start and I love how it has direction.

Won't you smile for me?
I can't stand to see the rain in your eyes.
Dry your tears little girl,
And let the sunlight beam through.

^^ Very descriptive yet its broad enough for everyone to imagine their own picture too.

I don't know how long I can go on this way.
I never thought I'd miss you so.
Oh how my heart beats for you.
Longing for your return.

^^Images and emotion right after, great. Although the piece would be stronger if they were mixed together.

Your image is sewn into me.
With your eyes of a thousand stars,
Skin as golden as the sun,
And that unforgettable smile.

^^ beautiful and broad again thanks.

Where are you little girl?
I'm so empty without you.
I was untrue.
Please don't make me regret my mistake.

^^ The flow is messy here to me at least. But the stanza makes a point.

Come back little girl,
Come back to me.
Don't leave me,
Can't you see I'm in love?

^^ Love the ending with questions, they give the piece more to end on. Leaving the reader to think to any degree makes it more universal.

Your flow is a bit off in places and your word choice is weak sometimes, otherwise the piece would be perfect.

4/5