Un-Reconstructable Railways

by Sunshine   Apr 6, 2012


I repeat wild songs to
link each railway
with another broken track-
where melodies are wrecked
like myself;
a clone of the trains I ride..
empty and cold.
Carrying things unsure
if belongs to me,
or became mine.

Yesterdays in my pocket,
gum, and apologies at
the back of each photo.
Feeding on songs that I dedicate
for you whenever a new-old railway is
reconstructed, perhaps you
pass by, perhaps it leads you
right to me.

Although I wouldn't be
as healed as you,
but you'll hear me
repeating the same wild songs
that helped linking each
track with another,
conspired to get us retracted.

And I'm sorry it'll be
too late, unable to look back
into your soaked eyes as you
hear my wildest song on the radio,
"Un-reconstructable" played
in my loving memory.

I just hope, you'd notice that every
railway you'd be traveling on,
would have never existed,
if I wasn't sewing tracks...
while you were gone.

by: Rania Moallem

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  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    What a terrific creativity you've portrayed here. Incorporating railway tracks to a frosty relationship. Quiet sad, you showed how much you ought to be with this person but fate distorts your compatibility hence you both go apart. I hope the character that lost out gets to rekindle good times if he or she deserves the subject. A beautifull piece with vivid imagery and smooth flow. Bon Travail!!! Nana ;-).

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I've never read a free verse as.. free as this (if that makes sense) This just bursts with imagery and emotion. I am speechless. This is intriguing.

    'I just hope, you'd notice that every
    railway you'd be traveling on,
    would have never existed,
    if I wasn't sewing tracks...
    while you were gone.'

    This can be interpreted in a lot of ways but to me, it's seems like you miss this person so much. Perhaps he abandoned you.? and he has moved on. But you just can't seem to let him go. And you think he's ungrateful to all the things you've done for him.. The ending sounded bitter and sad to me.

    Great write 5/5 Keep writing :)

    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I've never read a free verse as.. free as this (if that makes sense) This just bursts with imagery and emotion. I am speechless. This is intriguing.

    'I just hope, you'd notice that every
    railway you'd be traveling on,
    would have never existed,
    if I wasn't sewing tracks...
    while you were gone.'

    This can be interpreted in a lot of ways but to me, it's seems like you miss this person so much. Perhaps he abandoned you.? and he has moved on. But you just can't seem to let him go. And you think he's ungrateful to all the things you've done for him.. The ending sounded bitter and sad to me.

    Great write 5/5 Keep writing :)

    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow, I love it! First, the title caught my eye. I like the repetition of these 'wild songs' and the links you have with this person... It was intriguing.

    The opening stanza was so deep, and filled with raw emotion. I really connected to it, as well as the entire poem.

    And I reallly love this part: "Yesterdays in my pocket,
    gum, and apologies at
    the back of each photo."

    I love it!

    Amazing poem hon <3

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Yesterdays in my pocket,
    gum, and apologies at
    the back of each photo.

    ^ Sizzling Hot.

    I like the incorporation of Unreconstructable .. Is it a real song?

    -- This piece is so awesome. so dramatic in the end. Pitch-Perfect!

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