Oh hun. What I absolutely love is the metaphor that you have used as your life being railway tracks. I'd imagine you'd be riding the train on the tracks and your life going either way. I'd imagine that you are trying to connect the tracks together, maybe your lover was on another track and you wanted to meet with them so you tried to connect the tracks together. I simply think this image is beautiful and creative.
From reading, I'd assume that you are trying to connect yourself with your lover by music, as if he would hear you and make is way to you. I wonder if he would be doing the same, to try and connect to you. Maybe it was his music instead of yours that would bring you together. Either way it is a lovely thought that you would try to end up on the same track going the same direction.
An awesome write hun I adored it.

x

Truly outstanding. This is prime example why I've always maintained your status as a genius with words. Brilliant nana, utterly beautiful.

Nana, I knew it.

You said you were writing something new,
Somehow it was obv gonna be super creative,

It's like a quarter to three here, and I awoke and knew i had to check the site.

What I love here is the title...
to think something is "un-reconstructable"
makes me think it is broken, it was capable
of being reconstructed once upon a time, and
I believe railways refer to the path of life you
are travelling, already set out and uncapable of change.

I also love the use of tracks...being the actual path you are taken, and the tone here is of sadness and longing that you could be destined for somewhere else.

Like Liz, I got the feeling that the person you were referring to was a lover, your best friend, and the breakage of togetherness.

I just fell in love with this piece,
you genius

love always
xxxxx

This was awesome. :) I loved the use of railroad tracks here. Really made the poem come to life. I could really see the tracks and all reconstructing themselves. And likening this to the one you loved was great that the tracks you built were leading to you. And hoping he would pass by. And then the melodies. How they stick in our mind of remembering people from the past. It almost turns to a broken record. All in all a great write. :)

Yesterdays in my pocket,
gum, and apologies at
the back of each photo.

^ Sizzling Hot.

I like the incorporation of Unreconstructable .. Is it a real song?

-- This piece is so awesome. so dramatic in the end. Pitch-Perfect!

Wow, I love it! First, the title caught my eye. I like the repetition of these 'wild songs' and the links you have with this person... It was intriguing.

The opening stanza was so deep, and filled with raw emotion. I really connected to it, as well as the entire poem.

And I reallly love this part: "Yesterdays in my pocket,
gum, and apologies at
the back of each photo."

I love it!

Amazing poem hon <3

I've never read a free verse as.. free as this (if that makes sense) This just bursts with imagery and emotion. I am speechless. This is intriguing.

'I just hope, you'd notice that every
railway you'd be traveling on,
would have never existed,
if I wasn't sewing tracks...
while you were gone.'

This can be interpreted in a lot of ways but to me, it's seems like you miss this person so much. Perhaps he abandoned you.? and he has moved on. But you just can't seem to let him go. And you think he's ungrateful to all the things you've done for him.. The ending sounded bitter and sad to me.

Great write 5/5 Keep writing :)

-X

I've never read a free verse as.. free as this (if that makes sense) This just bursts with imagery and emotion. I am speechless. This is intriguing.

'I just hope, you'd notice that every
railway you'd be traveling on,
would have never existed,
if I wasn't sewing tracks...
while you were gone.'

This can be interpreted in a lot of ways but to me, it's seems like you miss this person so much. Perhaps he abandoned you.? and he has moved on. But you just can't seem to let him go. And you think he's ungrateful to all the things you've done for him.. The ending sounded bitter and sad to me.

Great write 5/5 Keep writing :)

-X

What a terrific creativity you've portrayed here. Incorporating railway tracks to a frosty relationship. Quiet sad, you showed how much you ought to be with this person but fate distorts your compatibility hence you both go apart. I hope the character that lost out gets to rekindle good times if he or she deserves the subject. A beautifull piece with vivid imagery and smooth flow. Bon Travail!!! Nana ;-).