"She expected me to never forget her,
I realize I never will,
but the least she can do for me
is try her hardest
to live another life
that doesn't claim my identity."
Really powerful start. Leaves me thinking who 'she' is. Perhaps she's someone you hate, or she's you or maybe your past..

"She told me, no matter what,
it would be forever....
but I know the call was chasing me
like golden beer bottles
left on my front porch-
I can't take away the sun's
thirst."
Love the metaphor you've used here.

"The war following me
as I am falling
behind nuclear chemicals.

I can't be caught."
Really shows your struggle. Great imagery. Made me think of a girl running away from it all. Panting and her forhead streaming with sweat.

"And now that it's spread
past my feet, my ankles,
my chest,
my heart is already too deepened
with the sickening smoke of sulfur."
Kind of feels hopeless..

"She will never hear my goodbye,
she will never witness my last
I love you."
This is personally my favorite part.. I can feel the emotion. The sadness and hopelessness.

"And all I hope to send down
is a white angel
that will make her memory
end the world,
her heart must never desire
to recognize someone like me again."
Wow. Great ending. This can be interpreted in a lot of different ways..

Great piece, so captivating 5/5

-X

This peace cought my attention. 5/5

Vry beautifuly penned..and touching

Vry beautifuly penned..and touching

Vry beautifuly penned..and touching

I love this!! I love this song as well. I wrote a poem a few years back with the same title as the song. You always write with such emotion and grace and that will take you far in life. Yo have raw talent and it shows so well in this piece. Keep writing :] -Nik