Waiting Her

by LittleMermaid   Apr 7, 2012


Mind filled with anxiety, I was standing,
All by myself, I was staring.
New people around me with friends of their own,
First day in college and I was all alone.

"Let's go together," came her sweet voice,
I wondered if she could be as my choice.
She caught my hand as we walked,
I soon realized she was the one I had sought.

That was how our journey began,
Friendship, the journey of happiness and gain.
The sweetest relationship that we share,
The medium to overcome obstacles and fear

Weaving strange dreams, we had world of our own,
Along with the closeness that was not known.
We shared the joys and shared the pain,
And worked together for each of them.

Yes, there were days when we fought,
Broke into tears as we got hurt.
But being "Best Friends" as people say,
Intimacy grew up after every such day.

Then the day was waiting out,
Which we feared a lot about.
The day of departure and pain,
When our efforts to avoid went on vain.

Eyes filled with tears and promise made in heart,
We hugged tightly never wanting to be apart.
"Yanzi, how long should I wait?" asked I,
"I'll be back soon," you answered with a cry.

And then you were gone with duties to be made,
Holding on the memories that will never fade.
Years passed and events side by side,
Yanzi, it's really hard without you being aside.

Cherishing the moments that we shared,
I feel the warmth of being cared.
With lots of stories remaining to be told,
I'm waiting for your arrival for all those to unfold.

I think of the joy that is going to surround,
When you come back and hug me around.
And when those beautiful days fall on,
Then promise me Yanzi, never to leave me alone.

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  • 12 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    I truly hope Yanzi comes back.
    I too remember my College days when you walk into a room knowing no one, and the others seem to know each other. You do feel so very alone so I do sympathise!
    Another geat poem, Very enjoyable to read.

    • 12 years ago

      by LittleMermaid

      Peter,i happily say that Yanzi is back!

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I like this for being so easily relatable. We all have that friend who's separated from us, and I can feel the longing that you want/need your friend back by your side. In some parts of the poem, the rhymes flowed well, but there are parts where you seemed desperate to rhyme that you sacrifice the meaning just so it will rhyme.
    This for example:
    "That was how our journey began,
    Friendship, the journey of happiness and
    gain."
    ---'Gain' was clumsily written, and it's not a perfect rhyme for 'began'

    ""Yanzi, how long should I wait?" asked I,
    "I'll be back soon," you answered with a
    cry."
    ---I like this part. It made the poem more personal, yet for the topic you've presented, it was relatable. It's really hard to say goodbye and the emotion a person gets from that have been beautifully penned here by adding your conversation with your friend. I like that.
    Overall, the emotional impact won over the poem. Keep writing
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Thank you for liking my poem..thank u so much!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Wow!your stuff is very touchy..so much emotion and very friendly..i really really like it gurl...you're a great writer...i love this line

    I think of the joy that is going to surround,
    When you come back and hug me around.
    And when those beautiful days fall on,
    Then promise me Yanzi, never to leave me alone.
    rate 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenn

    "Cherishing the moments that we shared,
    I feel the warmth of being cared.
    With lots of stories remaining to be told,
    I'm waiting for your arrival for all those to unfold."

    This is one of those stanza's where your like
    "wow why didn't I think of that!" :)

    I'm really loving the flow of this poem, and I connected because I have a best friend much like the one you described here.
    Beautifully written.

    5/5
    Jenn

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