His Reason

by lost angel   Apr 7, 2012


There's a lonely girl,
In a cold world.
She's done trying,
Because there's no deniying,
There's no one to care.
Her eyes fill with tears,
Because of the memories,
She can still see.
And the whisper that,
She can still hear.
With every tear,
Falls a memory,
To the floor.
She's suffercating,
Gasping for air.
She doesn't understand,
She doesn't know were to begin.
So she's suffercating,
Gasping for air.
She lost the love of her life,
Now there's no meaning to strife.
She doesn't understand how he could do it.
She thought she was his reason to fight.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    "Because there's no deniying,
    There's no one to care."
    Change deniying to denying

    "With every tear,
    Falls a memory,
    To the floor."
    This is my favorite part. Great imagery, great metaphor, but sadly, I don't like the punctuation. You should remove the commas, that way it'll flow better. I paused with each line, so it kinda ruined it.

    Still a great piece, though. The ending was also great.

    "She doesn't understand how he could do it.
    She thought she was his reason to fight."
    He did fight for you. Maybe it was really his time to go.. And he's watching over you in a better place :) 5/5 Keep writing!

    -X

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