Comments : A goodbye Forever

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Awww thats really sad, but well written poem:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Some suggestions :D

    * I am wont be = I won't be
    * Capitalize all the 'i' because it is really annoying to the eye
    * better to remove the </3 from the title because from your touching words, one can understand that it is a broken heart that is speaking.

    Great :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    I am so sorry
    but I have to leave
    in the found memory of our love deceived
    I found some courage as well as some words
    To tell you how I feel
    ......The intro starts remarkably well with you apologizing for what you are about to do, and that is leaving. Your love faded and there was nothing you could do. In the line "To tell you how i feel", "To" as in the first word. "T" must not be in capital, the same goes for the next line.

    To tell you I had to leave
    So move on and be strong
    I wont be there so just take care
    For my love for you
    Shall never go lone
    Just take care my dear
    For I say A goodbye
    FOREVER...

    You tell your loved one to move without you for you dont see any future in your love, well written. Loved how you wish well for your loved one as you say goodbye. Well written