180

by Lioness   Apr 10, 2012


Please;
squeeze my
neck just
a little tighter,
so you can
mark my skin
with your body
as well as your
words.

I can feel coarse hands
around my throat
and pray that with
every gasp I'm
not inhaling in
your venomed fog.

Your breath enrages
my reddened cheeks,
which are now scorched
and stained with a salty
twinge.

180 degrees -

You're different...

unlike before.

You slowly release
the tight grip on
my neck and was
no longer trying
to wring it -

Nor could I
feel your poisoned
breath upon my
blood stained cheeks -

though you were
trying to soothe
them with your lips.

I can feel myself
wanting to slip
away as you go
from one extreme
to another.

It's like you are
trying to kill me and
then save me -

at the same time.

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  • 12 years ago

    by LoVerSLaND

    4/5. I loved it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Liz, Liz, Liz You get better with every write. I simply love this piece. I liked your title as it doesn't give a too much away which makes the reader curious as to what the poem could be about. As for the poem itself I loved your descriptions and how you described the hands around your neck. You made me feel the poem not just on an emotional level but on a physical level too as I imagined myself being stangled as I read this piece - that is how deeply connected I was thanks to your simple yet effective descriptions.

    5/5

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Please;
    squeeze my
    neck just
    a little tighter,
    so you can
    mark my skin
    with your body
    as well as your
    words.

    I thought this opened up the poem great, it really showed what the poem was going to be about in a bang, it's such a deep sadness throughout this whole poem. . . and you've written in a way where it can be suspenseful with the short lines and breaks, I love poems like that. . because of the way I read it in my mind, it's a great poem

    Awesome job , I give it a 5 (:

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Ohhh! I love this :)

    Love how you did a complete 180 also in the poem. Going from him wanting to kill you, to saving you at the same time.

    I could picture this as I read it. Seeing the title made me interested in what it was about. As soon as I read it, my eyes wouldn't leave the poem :)

    Love this. But all your poems are amazing!
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    OMG Liizzzzzzzzzzz !!

    I totally get why you called 180, just perfect title for an extremely powerful poem.

    The mixed feelings that you get from the tone of the writer is so deep, its like this person is contradicting himself around you. One moment he acts with an extreme, then a totally opposite extreme comes over.

    Woooow, tou made it vividly possible for me to imagine the whole thing happening infront of me. What a powerful poet you are, dear.

    Nomination and all the hopes for a win!

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