Nice sensual love poem, good work from both of you.

I do not know why, but I really like the title, maybe it's because I like both words as they are and together they seem to work very well too. It creates some sort of image and I have to admit, that I thought the poem would be negative, which is probably because darkness has a negative connotation, at least to me it does.

I actually agree with Abed about removing "the" in verse four because it would flow better. :)

That is the only thing I'd change too, I think you both cooperate very well together and I love the harmony that radiates from this poem. Absolutely beautiful :)

A very sensual poem that has a tender tone to it..good job on writing this Olwin..enjoyed the read :)

/sensual as a lovers embrace
it gently touches the
edge of the darkness// I loved the imgery here ... beautifully described.

//a moment lost in time together
your heart pulsating with the night
as I hold you close
// another set of my favorite lines.

The complete poem has such a warm and soft tone that you actually feel the love :) beautifully penned.