Comments : Believing in greater (Double Tetractys)

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    WOW Chelsey, This piece is so inspirational, it gives you that feeling like anything is possible, and I love the title and the form you used too,

    The flow was flawless, so smooth, what a brilliant poem that will stick in my mind always, plus I am adding to my favourites!

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Chelsey, this was an amazing piece.
    Specially, I'm impress by the flow that is so smooth and I don't think I need to mention the message because that's also extremely clear to the reader.

  • 12 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    I find it hard to find the right words for short poetry like this and you've done it nicely, well done on this poem. . . I like how it started with faith and ended in believe. . . . . very inspirational poem in shorts words :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Amen to that. I am a Believer

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    WOW...you are becoming quite the power house with formed poetry my sweet.... very very nice!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Awesome formed poem hun. You did well with this one. Love the simplicity and the image shown. Awesome write

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Chelsey, this is one of the best you have ever written, IMO .

    Soooooo inspirational, and wise.

  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    Faith
    can move
    the mountains ,
    split deepest seas,
    and bring forth light to the whole galaxy

    Confirming that all things are possible
    for all that starve
    and believe
    greater
    truths

    A perfect syllable count and a deep message using this restrictive form of poetry. Beautiful and indeed worthy of the front page.

    A slightly different rewording (gramatically) of your thoughts presented here (hopefully with similar meaning and correct syllable count):

    Faith
    can move
    big mountains
    split deepest seas
    and bring forth light to a whole world

    Confirms my belief in all living things
    in all who starve
    and believe
    greater
    truths

    A very thoughtfully worded verse, and hopefully a winner in many a hearts.

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    WOOOOOOOW Chels this poem is AWSOME, I really loved it. You penned this form,perfectly written:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I have to say, I really love this form, and it's a fun one to write, the hard part is getting it to flow...and the author did just that and more.

    The message is so rounded spiritually that it can touch us all, no matter what path of spirituality you follow and that is another reason why this poem touched me so...

    The title is beautiful... "Believing in greater" It's powerful and is such a perfect title for this formed poem. Usually I break down poems stanza by stanza or line by line, but to be honest this poem as a whole says so much all together...

    Believe and rejoicing in the beauty of a higher power... I really needed to highlight this piece, because the message is inspirational, the writing is elegant and the form is spot on-
    Well Done Chelsey