Attempt to vanish him IN my sight

i liked this one. very short an sweet. i liked the imagery here, very beautiful, yet couldn't really get a story from it. the first stanza was awesome. i just think the second stanza didn't end with the rhyme scheme in mind. other than that, i enjoyed this very much. great job. i hope to read much more of your work

Attempt to vanish him IN my sight

i liked this one. very short an sweet. i liked the imagery here, very beautiful, yet couldn't really get a story from it. the first stanza was awesome. i just think the second stanza didn't end with the rhyme scheme in mind. other than that, i enjoyed this very much. great job. i hope to read much more of your work

You have very good writing. Keep it up....you are talented

Thanks!

It was really heart felt i could envision the whole scenario as it rolled.kudos

Beautiful written

This poem is very short...but i wouldn't have it any other way. Beautifully written :)

This poem is very short...but i wouldn't have it any other way. Beautifully written :)

A nice short poem, but one that produced a vivid image to the reader. Beautifully written.
I liked it.

So often the truth of the heart appears most clear when our eyes are shut. I has trouble over riding the world of vision, but rules in the kingdom of darkness. Wonderful write

I thought this poem was written very well also, I also liked how you described a battle here between your mind and heart. Because you said your mind tries to not think about this person but your heart leads the thought right back into your mind. Very nice write here.

Love this(:

I LOVE this poem! ... and can so relate, as I'm sure many others can do. Really like your writing... You have a talent, and that is of touching the heart... which to me is what poetry is all about :)

WELL DONE! :D
~ Olwin

Seems like you have the hots for this guy.
I can relate to it in the same way i have the hots for my girl. Its a good, short, to the point poem.Like it
Sun spots

This was a great poem. You want to try and tell yourself that you don't want to love the guy but your heart is saying otherwise. I thought that emotion was expressed well in this poem. All in all a great job. :)

Thank you..

Your a great writer :]

5/5

Wow girl so sensetive short bt full of emotion i ador this part
I close my eyes...
attempt to vanish him in my sight
but my mind shouting to stop
This heart of mine yelling for his love...
keep it up :)

This is a great poem, I love the way it spoke to my soul, outstanding work, I look forward to reading more of your work

You really expressed emotions in such a short n sweet manner......really nice..looking forward to other poems from u..keep writing^_^