Comments : 6 months

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Awww this reminds me of high school love <3 I have a few suggestions for you....the flow was off just a bit, Id consider some rewording or adding the same amount of syllables to each line to give it a better flow..

    Other than that this took me back to childhood love, so cute!

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    I really liked your rhyming, it was just good and your choice of words were amazing. I felt this piece was full of hope and joy, that you have made it thus far is no joke but there is still a tough road ahead, be strong and love each other always and i know and believe you will be together always.