by La Reina De Corazones Apr 20, 2012
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
I want this river of red to drain from this useless corpse of who i am |
This is a good write, very dark and somewhat sad, I enjoyed the read |
by Mello193
Some small grammatical errors that im sure you can just edit away. other than that i couldnt find a rhyme scheme however, other than those small little things i enjoyed this a lot. i think of this mostly in a song and in that respect its awesome, almost Gothic. i think you should re-write some lines to maybe add some extra depth to the piece. overall pretty good write. |
by Steven Croat
Sad but beautiful lines... |
by Adan7777
Good pen. |
by Angel
This is great as all your poems are :) |