Another good one! keep writing!

"Once, long ago, there was a young boy
Who was saddled with feelings, of pain and of joy"
Nice start. Makes me want to just sit back and listen to the story. I also love how you used 'saddled', it's not over-used, making the beginning stand out.

"Deprived of sleep, his reality became
blurred
Some say this triggered the killings that
occurred"
Wow.. well-written. Really shows the struggle of the character, he's disturbed.

"During trial, he mumbled words that
seemed mad
"Good old mum and dad""
Perhaps he had a rough childhood..

"This is where our story did end
Or did he escape?... Killing again"
Neat ending. I simply love it. It leaves the reader thinking..

Awesome piece, combining your story-telling abilities and poetry skills. The rhymes flowed really well, and the story was simultaneous. 5/5 :)

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Wow this is totally amazing there one small grammar mistake in "he wished he were dead"
should be "he wished he was dead" other than that its amazing and i really love the ending adds mystery to the story gr8 talent you are a gr8 writer u could combine story telling and poetry in one awesome piece 5/5 and favorite keep on the good work =)

Wow great job!! loved the emotional feeling i got from reading it im deffinatly gonna nominate it!! 5/5 keep up the great work!! hehe

Do you know my life?? cuz this fits into it pretty well. haha Top Notch poem really. this was really clever and really imaginative, I thought more gilles de rais. really cool poem

Wow, this piece is very well wow. Your word choice is fantastic and the style you used is capturing for this piece. The mood was definatly conveyed well, as was the "story" of it. Excellent job.

The flow worked very well
"Enacting his terrors, the man did find pleasure
Hunting his prey in his own leisure
Homeless and vagrants were found by the noose
Subject to torture and weeks of abuse" -this was the only part that caught me up reading, but i'm not sure anything should be done to it.
the only other suggestion i will make is in the end. to me it would sound better if he said "good old mum AND GOOD/DEAR OLD dad" - but like i said, its personal preference. good job, i enjoyed reading it

You have talent

Great poem, I really don't like dark poems but this piece was mind gripping, intense and twisted and I think that what makes this a great poem. I really like the ending because it leave me wandering what happen next and was this desire to kill curable.

Excellent.

Love it! Crazy and epic! Love love love it!!!!