Comments : Problems

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    True, very true.

    Problems, problems. They always come without us looking for them, but that's the way we learn to live lifes and I guess they can also make our life worth while. I mean it is because of those problems that we can realize who our friends are or what we are capable of doing. But I do agree they are also a pain. So yeah some are simple and others hard. Good write, I just feel that the flow was a bit off aside from that it was a good read.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Well written, good flow...

    t is infinite and random
    Some is easy, some is hard
    We are born to have those
    Life isn't simple and that's one its parts..

    i like this line..keep writing more=)

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenn

    I like this because it speaks simple truth of life--Blunt and to the point.
    There will always be another problem, big or small.

    "Give me everything you got"
    I love the challenge here, tell the world to bring it.
    Nicely done.

    5/5
    Jenn

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    "Pressure me please
    Calculate my Math
    I'm doing it easy
    Give me everything you got"
    Like these part haha good poem 5/5 keep on=)

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This poem holds a nice message. I only wish you've added punctuation, like a question mark here:
    "But, what can I do"
    A period on the first line here:
    "It might be easy if you have a clue
    Problems, Oh problems"
    So it would be easier to read and understand.
    The title: when I read it, I thought this was going to be about life problems, perhaps something inspirational etc. and it is. the incorporation of 'Math' is predictable. This is a nice piece, if you just used something else, it would stand out more. So it's an average poem.
    "Problems, Oh problems"---this seems to add to its musical quality. I'm not too keen on it, but I don't hate it.
    Overall, still a good read.
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Wow, i really liked the message that you conveyed here and also how you conveyed it, problems.. some are easy some are hard, i like how you incorporated that in this poem . tthis is a very good and relate-able poem .......so nice work keep it up :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    I felt the content and message of the poem was good. I would suggest you not capitalize some letters which are clearly continuing from a previous line, that kinda messes up the flow of the poem. I would also suggest you put commas where necessary. Overall, this is a great poem.