Allie this truly is an inspiration. it touched my heart and i'm sure whoeverr reads this will have gained the will they need to live

This really made my day, Allie. I'm glad you're back on track, and if you ever feel like you're losing ground, remember you have friends to give you a hand :)
Now, the poem--
"Please never give in,
please never give up."
---I really like the 'please', it really shows that the persona is pleading that she doesn't want to see life wasted, and that she wants to help. Really nice.
"I know that you're heart has turned to tin,
but is there anything I can do to lift your
spirits up?"
I like the tin metaphor. Gives the piece a nice rhythm and imagery of the person you're talking to who has given up. But I also have a feeling that the person you're talking to is the person you were before..
"I know that you've been hurt,
I know that you just want to die,
but please don't spill your blood into the
dirt and watch as I begin to cry!"
---This truly shows that the persona cares and wouldn't want to see blood spilled in a very wrong manner.
"Gosh, I know that you can't take it,
I truly understand how you feel
but please don't make that deep slit
with that sharp blade of steel!"
---Really nice ending. I love this piece.
Shows hope and gives inspiration to anyone and everyone who reads it. Great job! Keep writing and keep fighting :)
-X

This is close to home, bring tears to my eyes
this certainly was an inspiration to read

Beautiful poem, it something that can comfort a friend shouldering pain and hopeless...this is an inspirational piece that people must live their life...and there is somebody willing to comfort them..it is very amazing! I like the flows in every sentence because every rhyme here is perfect...the rhythm and the scheme are clearly stated...keep always writing:)
5/5