I really loved this(:

All day long
She is on my mind
No matter what I'm doing
She always finds a way in

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get rid of "is" in the first line of the stanza and change "she" to "she's"
Just sounds better

This is true no matter what the one you love you just can let go, always thinking bout them

For a while I wont think of her
Then someone says something that brings her to mind
I cant help but smile
No matter how mad I am

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Really loved this!
No matter how mad you are you just can't help yourself but smile every time you hear her name (: so beautiful

She is more beautiful than any sunset
Her smile shines brighter than the sun
Her eyes twinkle in the night sky
She always brings a smile to my face

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My fav stanza!
This had a great flow and rhyme to it! Your explaining yourself on how you see her, she's more beautiful then any sunset, her eyes are brighter then the sun, her eyes twinkle like the night sky. So beautiful

Over all I thought this was beautiful and whoever you wrote it too will be so amazed darl(:

5/5 keep writing

Aw that is so cute :) if you've known her for a while then i say go for it :) if you havent known her that long i'd wait a bit. just go for it. you never know she may want you too :)

Before you proceed, weigh the End. Win, is leap over distraction. Distraction is a hasty pull. Love is a seed, it grows with time.

Your afraid that if you ask her you may loos her but if you dont you'll never have her i agree with angel