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So much has been said, and I agree with everyone. This is a heart-wrenching piece that everyone has gone through one way or another, and I love how you penned that here. To be honest, when I reached the "hide in the bathroom" part I thought this was going to be one of those suicide poems, but of course, it's not and I like that. The setting you chose is over-used, but your wording made it work and it added to the sad atmosphere. Great job there. I won't analyze this further, as I'd only echo what Lucero have said. Perhaps the "outstretched lips" is the most unpoetic phrase here (for me) but maybe it's because that's the first time I've read that. So the ending, to me, was confusing. It seems powerful "my outstretched lips will not be forged by my broken heart.
Perhaps not." But how can a broken heart forge an outstretched lip? Maybe it's a metaphor for pouting. I don't know, maybe it's just my ignorance lol. Overall, I like this, just a bit confusing for me.
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No end to the days
I would hide in the
bathroom to drown
out the sound of
my tears with
running water

^ dear God, that was epic!! Seriously, that stanza amazed me and in that instant tears formed in my eyes because I know the embarrassment of crying in a bathroom and using runnning water to cover it up...That was brilliantly written.

This poem is terrbily sad, but I've always said to people, sad poems sometimes seem to turn out to be the best kind!

Well done Liz!

So sad :( once again you spoken to my heart. So much pain in this piece. It hurts to be ignored by someone. To be treated like nothing is wrong when the problem cuts deep. I love how your work is always so relatable.

5/5

This poem grabs the readers face and sticks it on the screen. It touched me, what an awesome poem it is:)
Great job Liz:)