Warm spring creates love tripple haiku

by Ole Carsten   May 1, 2012


Lovely late days
Warm wind is heating us up
Spring creates our love

Our hearts fill with rush
Sunshine tans our winter skin
Love colors our cheek

Lovely lazy heat
Are waiting for us outside
Summer is here soon

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  • 12 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    "Our hearts fills(fill) with rush
    Sunshine tans our winter skin
    Love colors our cheek"
    You made a grammar mistake, :) but now you can fix it lol.
    Pretty good write, you should check out some of my haiku's,
    4/5

    • 12 years ago

      by Ole Carsten

      Hi Kitty

      Tanks for Your advice, I have corrected it.
      Smilimg

      Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    This was astonishing. wonderful haiku's

    • 12 years ago

      by Ole Carsten

      Hi I appriciate your kind remarks they are giving me fuel for more task
      br
      Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    Wow, Ole. Loved it!

    Just two pointers. The first line of the first stanza is actually only 4 syllables. And a Haiku does not deal with "us" "I" and other pronouns. I would call this one a tripple senryu, which is basically the same thing except it deals with people as well.

    Great job!

    • 12 years ago

      by Ole Carsten

      Hi Mathias, according to http://howmanysyllables.com/
      It has to be ok, or mybay I am wrong, but I counted it.
      I appriciate your kind remarks, and count once more
      br
      Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Hi Thanks for a wonderful comment

  • 12 years ago

    by Odin Ebbesen

    You are something special, can't understand the number of people voting is low?

    A five

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