Comments : Warm spring creates love tripple haiku

  • 12 years ago

    by Odin Ebbesen

    You are something special, can't understand the number of people voting is low?

    A five

  • 12 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Hi Thanks for a wonderful comment

  • 12 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    Wow, Ole. Loved it!

    Just two pointers. The first line of the first stanza is actually only 4 syllables. And a Haiku does not deal with "us" "I" and other pronouns. I would call this one a tripple senryu, which is basically the same thing except it deals with people as well.

    Great job!

    • 12 years ago

      by Ole Carsten

      Hi Mathias, according to http://howmanysyllables.com/
      It has to be ok, or mybay I am wrong, but I counted it.
      I appriciate your kind remarks, and count once more
      br
      Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    This was astonishing. wonderful haiku's

    • 12 years ago

      by Ole Carsten

      Hi I appriciate your kind remarks they are giving me fuel for more task
      br
      Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    "Our hearts fills(fill) with rush
    Sunshine tans our winter skin
    Love colors our cheek"
    You made a grammar mistake, :) but now you can fix it lol.
    Pretty good write, you should check out some of my haiku's,
    4/5

    • 12 years ago

      by Ole Carsten

      Hi Kitty

      Tanks for Your advice, I have corrected it.
      Smilimg

      Ole