by Amy
Good choice of words like the |
by Elise
Thank you :) When I was writting it I thought of Johanna from Sweeney Todd (2007) If you haven't seen it do look at it. It's a bit grim but it is amazing. |
by Elise
Have a look at you messages I have sent you one. |
by mo3taz
Nice writing here, I like the internal rhymes like: |
by White Orchid
I likd this. It had sad and happy moments in it and it did flow really nicely. One thing in the sixth stanza you got a little typo with the word understand. ;) but other than that I really enjoyed reading this. Nice job! :) |
by Moonlit Candles
I thought this poem was great. A little bit of help for you. Try to really think of words that don't seem forcedvto set a rhyme. Some of these seem that way. Maybe it's just me. And watch for some grammar errors. Such as change in line six "we" to "we're. And just watch syllables when rhyming. you don`t want one line with 4 syllables, then the next with ten. It doesn't flow as well. But all in all this was done great. Had a great message. Nice work. :) |