I wrote this after I watched Act of Valor. That is a good show.:)

I took the pain that was for you
Then got burned by burning fuel
I danced with bullets in the air

But back home did you care
^
Very nice flow and like the metaphors to.

My life I would give
So you can grow and live
I'm drowning in the screams of death

I died in failure, did you care
^
Very emotional my favourite part
"my life I would give,
so you would grow and live"
Very touching

I fought for you
I died for you
Your daughter wife and son
^
Nice carry on flow love the way when you read a good poem it just goes right onto the next sentence.

So I'm asking you my child do you CARE!
^
Loved the end touch to this poem.
I'm giving you 5/5
And adding you as one of my favourite poem writers

Great imagery...:=)