Unjustified love

by Alanis   May 3, 2012


Your heart's silver mine's gold let's get
Together and watch heaven unfold
I will steel your heart you can steal
Mine, this is the making of a perfect crime.
As I hold your hand, you pull me close
these are the moments we love the most
Our hearts beat as one till the day was done.
Kissing in the moonlight never letting each other
Go, holding tight. You're just what I've always
Needed, never leave me. Our love is what the
Whole world must see. show them that two different
Worlds can combine. Who thought someone so
Wonderfully different could be mine? Your deep
Blue eyes look into my soul. Your love seems
To fill a huge hole.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Fulcrous

    In response to Orchid, I thought that "steel" was intentional after seeing "gold" because unlike gold, which is a pure element, steel is an alloy, a mix of elements (it is impure) thus justifying the title "unjustified love".
    Other than this fact I agree with everyone else and find this a pleasant and emotional read.

  • 12 years ago

    by Alanis

    Thank you:) I will watch out for spelling next time. Thank u so much for the comment!

  • 12 years ago

    by White Orchid

    Wow! This was really good and I loved how you described moments between the two people but just on a side note, it is spelled steal not steel, but other than that critique I thought your poem was perfect! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Alanis

    Thank u :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Ya its emotional:)
    Well written:)

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