So many different things I keep wanting to highlight and be like 'omg, I love this part', but then it ended up being the whole poem. You really kicked butt at this challenge, and it's absolutely no wonder you won!

"for my voice no longer carries
the tune of romance"

I cannot believe this. I've heard your voice, it drips with romance! ;)

OHHHHHHHH NO WAY! YAKI AND YOU TOOK MY BREATH AWAY! I WISH I COULD WRITE LIKE YOU BOTH ONE DAY! *PULLING MY HAIRS AWAY*

MHM. WOW.......!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I truly missed your poems, I still have "Don't pursue it will find you" and your other poem "Linger" still lingers in my mind every once in a while I swear.
You're a great writer and your writing only gets better all the time =) This is a good one and your descriptions were great, created a good image in my head.

Shine on~
I miss you!

You created many fantastic images in this poem, which goes along great with the quote you used to write from. Powerful piece friend. Awesome, so well written and heartfelt :) Impossible to pick just one part because the whole thing is strong but these lines stood alone for me:
as your eyes laugh
at my demise
I writher at your feet
longing for the warmth
I called my friend
which has now
abandoned me
Lostlove~

Took my breath away... love each line. 5/5

Bliss,*

I prefer this poem a lot more than the other one I read because it's got a lot more to it in my opinion. You used all the foundations of poetry to build a poem and the emotion was evident.
In the first stanza I was instantly drawn in by "I stumbled at the mercy of your touch", something beautifully mysterious here.

" as you smudged lust
across my lips"

^interesting, it's almost as though your lipstick of lip balm became symbolic of lust, as red is usually symbolic of such for some reason this was the image that came to my mind.

I like the breaks in structure, it built the tone and created some really lovely pauses that let your words sink into the reader.

I noticed music is a reoccurring thing in your latest works. It's really nice to see. Especially some of the traditional terms like 'waltz' it makes for a more purer essence (of course that was before the loss of innocence).

-Mel

What Mel said, really. :) This is beautiful Bliss! I love the way you broke up the stanzas, causing the reader to pause, putting emphasis where emphasis was needed. After reading the piece and then seeing the challenge, your interpretation is wonderful! There's a lot of room to dive and dissect in here, without the actual read being too 'heady.' I'm especially fond of the line "I stumbled at the mercy of your touch" .. lovely work! x

Comments from judging:

Using the quote as her inspiration or challenge was a great idea. Here she wrote of innocence gone awry, from not only the emotional aspect but the physical as well. She pieced together everything that really made you feel as a reader that you are a part of this story. Everything is so descriptive and gorgeous, I can't go into detail much more than this.

Such a beautiful poem, it gave me a very visual idea as the words flowed. It also felt very, very deep. I definitely enjoyed it.