Good poem. I catch your feeling here about the girl you describe in this poem. And guess, she will be glad and happy if she read this one.
--She is more beautiful then Aphrodite herself,--then--than must be type here I think.
--I love her more then all of the cakes combined,--then--it's "than".
Although, some parts are rocky to read but I enjoy reading this. Keep writing more:=)