by Xanthe
"I used to hear that laughter" |
by Angel
Aw this is really sad. i almost cried but its so beautiful :') |
by Max
The story here was gr8 |
by Paul Gondwe
He described everything, |
by Yrem Crish
I appreciate your suggestion here... |
by Georgia
Your such a good writer. This is truly great. Keep writing ! |
I like whole idea of your poem here, very new and somewhat refreshing than most topics we normally see here. You did good in keeping the poem interesting making the length enjoyable and not boring. All in all, very good. |
by sun spots
It starts of good and just gets better.Well done. |
OMGood ness, I really really love that, what's your secret, it's such a great piece of work, with oyur word choice and the way you made the line, it is great |
by Illusion
Excellent!!! That's all I could say... |
Really nice piece, although more of a story rather than a poem. I liked all the same |
by L
I read it and all the way, I picture a good story until I got to the end and I find out he died and that just took me by surprised for some odd reason i didn't expected that and so I didn't feel sad when I read the story since I was not picturing the whole idea. Until I realized that yeah, the friend donated perhaps the cornea or the entire eyes for her... And so now she can see but i feel she might rather be blind. |
by Wicked Ways
Wow that was a powerful piece of poetry, it hada sad tone to it too and i was afraid of the ending, and i was right to be how you said he died, and left you a note saying take care of my eyes, I never read a poem like this before, its nice, how you conveyed your message here, howyou miss his his, his voice made everything beautiful, its a really lovely and deeply sadden poem. but a good one none the less. . . keep up the good work |
by honeybump
I love this! I love the flow and the imagery! Well done! xo |
by CuteThingsGoneWrong
This was an interesting point of view. I had a blind friend once and i used to ask him why she always wanted to go to the movies with me. Apparently she sees the world much more vivid then either you or I because she paints her own picture. |
by Silent Girl
I really like the flow of the word's i can picture this :) |
by nouriguess
Isn't this talking about that movie... What was its title again? Errrm! |
Well written friend.........i simply loved this! |
by Marvellous
Nothing has come to stay, but truth. When it's high time, summary arrives. |
by Silent Girl
Very nice poem i can relate :) 5/5 |