6ft deep

by Rebirth   May 14, 2012


6 foot deep
And am still going under
Pressure so high
Voice choked in not letting out
The pain so hard
Like hearts gonna explode
Eyes so heavy, tears wouldn't drop
Entangled in a web so thick it extinguish flames
Looking upward not even a ray of light
Just as dark as the darkness below
So cold bones ache
But with just a smile i hide it all

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  • 12 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    WOW! i love it , so much emotion. great description

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "ace" should be "ache" in ending lines....otherwise this was a short but effective poem in that while you didn't use as many images or words to describe the sadness, you used emotion. I thought the part where you explained not being able to cry was traumatic, that feeling of being so suffocated.

    Keep writing and thanks for the comment on my poem!

  • 12 years ago

    by JustAnotherPoet

    It is really nice. I can feel your despair in the poem and the last line made my heart ache. Though the girl is suffering, she still masks it all with a smile. Good poem! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Wow. Great poem. Keep writing:)

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