Comments : Ash's Weakness

  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    Beautiful, so much mystery, and creative units, I love the word choice you used and so on

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    Hmm this is original
    i haven't seen anybody talking about personalities
    within in poem till now but you

    i didn't like repeating "dark princess"
    but i guess u didn't have any other words
    to use
    and u used many filler words and lines
    which i suggest revising

    over all
    it was great write
    5/5 keep writing =)

  • 12 years ago

    by Georgia

    Oh wow, this is amazing !! Unique and amazingly written 500/5 ;) x

  • 12 years ago

    by Illusion

    This is unique and beautifully written..

  • 12 years ago

    by Cardwell

    This is so very beautiful!
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Silent Girl

    Very well written poem :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    "Dying inside but with a smile"....oh, how that line touched me! I enjoyed this piece - just one very, very minor constructive feedback, sometimes the word phrasing gets a little confusing (maybe its just to me), but it definitely doesn't detract the poem's beauty!