A river of love

I also got caught questioning swatching. . but anyways, other than that this piece was beautiful but had a serenity tone to it. . . . I loved the two stanzas very much, it spoke to me, like you were engulfed by love and it surrounded you like nothing else could ever. . . make you feel the way this person does. its a lovely piece of poetry,

keep up the good work!

5/5

Hi Xanthe

Maybe you are right, slang is not the best, but it is ment in a very specifik way.
It should underline the virtual flow from a river, in the extreme meaning surfing with your eyes for something beautiful.

I keep you warning in mind and find other sentenses

"Standing at the shore watching,
it feels so good swatching."

Forced rhyme^ I didn't know what you meant by swatching. I searched it, what I got said 'swatch' is a slang word for cool or awesome >.<
Most likely that's not what you're implying here, so I suggest you change this. Don't allow rhymes to take over the place of clarity.

Other than that, I love the soothing and relaxing pace this poem has. The words are simple yet they connected with/to each other. Beautiful
-X