The girl and her veil

I think this was good. Such a hard thing to write about. Keep writing! I like your stuff.

I think the foundation is there and the feeling is really felt but its a hard subject to write about and write about well. Edit, edit and edit again. Some of the words are unecessary to get the thought across. Take out any words that are redundant. Also read the poem aloud, you can find flow better when you read aloud, in fact poetry was meant to be read aloud. Keep writing.

Not a bad poem ... i thought it could of used alot more emotion i liked the use of the tittle and how it was put into the piece ...

its a hard subject to write about sadly it happens alot ... keep writing :)

A really good poem, i like the idea... however i think it could use a little revising.

Sad poem 5/5