Comments : Pleading for peace

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Hmm..."Pleading for piece" at the first site of this title I got interested to read about it...

    "Women of this planet
    Please, hear my call
    So that we can prevent regret
    And bring happiness to all"

    --Well, the starting part is good. I like the way you write the ending rhymes here..it sounds cool.

    "This peace we shall call love
    I t will be an unstable alliance
    Something further generations will speak of
    And that can disappear in an instance"

    --Yeah, because of love we have peace on this earth and because of it the gaps of hatred will vanish and we'll be together unite in one hand. There is no discrimination in gender, race and etc., nice stanza...

    "But for the time of its duration
    It will be glorious and amazing
    It will enhance mankind's imagination
    And get heartbeats uncontrollably racing"

    --Yet, you mean this, love is a feeling that sometimes uncontrollable...and does everything because of it.--Good poem, Thomas...I really enjoy reading this stuff. Keep it up and keep writing always:))
    ~C