I figured if I waited a little longer that you would post another poem for me to read. Jacey, this poem is simply amazing and I love how you are so free and open with your heart in this poem. You let your emotions come off each line but you do so in such a poetic way as to make the poem non-cliche and not trite. The imagery you use is also very nice and I could see some re-occurring elements in this poem in some of your others poems. Like your using of the word calligraphy but I thought it went right along in the poem.

"and in these moments
I'm breathless,
for we've stole the starlit skies,
while a sweet jasmine mist
flirts with twilight."
^^^
This was my favorite stanza and by far the most colorful and full of beautiful imagery. I think that "stole" should be stolen though because of the tense but I could be wrong. I'm not a English expert it just looks like that is what it should be. But anyway, the poem is breathtaking and this part really shows your creativeness in using metaphors in poetry.

In all, I think you have done a great job with this poem and I am sure I know what you are talking about and for that I am happy for you. You express your feelings well and get a great message across in doing so. I can't wait to see more and I hope things continue to go well for you! Great job and keep writing!!

Hehe, I like it!! Reminded me of a song when I read the title.

Very cute, sweet, little poem.

Love it :)

This is so very beautiful and full of passion. the imagery is just so lovely and you have a great use of diction 5/5

Your poetry speaks so much in so few words.....the images and truth that your heart feels for this love of yours. Love the nature you include as well as that sense of being able to inspire the world with this beautiful paradise.....how you can do anything with those sweet kisses.

Great job :]

Short ,beautiful and meaningful poem.Well written!

I liked it!Great job!

Hi

What a great example of a short poem that works, You make your point with only a few lines. Poets (or Poetess') can fall into the trap of having too many stanzas with repetition because they do not feel they have fully shared their message.
I love the image portrayed by 'poetic calligraphy'
It makes me think of more traditional poems, every word earning it's place with fantastically beautiful flow, almost one in the eye of the arty scattered on the page modern poems.
'Burst' and 'passion' really shouldn't go with 'whisper' but it works here, that is testament to your writing ability.
I also love the term 'flirt with twilight' is the mist trying to overpower the dark, are they having a battle to dominate the sky?
Great love and passion in this with only 10 lines, well done.