I like everything about this poem,

Except this line
"I know I'll be loving you till the end."

It sounded force to me, I got used to the rhymes and I didn't feel like it rhymed with skin..

A sweet poem which shows the affection you have for this person.

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I really find this piece sweet but that line at the end, would it be just me?

My only problem with that line is the sound of till...
Perhaps until would sound better.. Just a suggestions though.

Awh you came up with a very sweet poem Kitty, this is so sensual and romantic. . .

its such a lovely piece. . .

5/5