Fix me not (a song lyrics)

by rock serenade   May 24, 2012


If I take all my sorrow and throw it in the ocean

the ocean will return to black ....(black)

If I tell my stories to the sky

the sky will cry .....(cry)

If I drop a tear on your guitar

it will only play sad songs

so don't ask me if I am alright

you know I am not

don't try to fix me

I swear it's too late

I am slike a violin without strings

yeah that kind of violin

I am that one in a million

when the sun goes down

and the moon appears

I feel surounded by all my fears

and I realy wanna see all of my dears

so don't try to fix me

I swear it's too late

for no reason I lied awake

trying to count all of my mistake

suddenly I see shadows carrying my bed

are they taking it to the endlesss land ??

I don't care fly me wherever you want

I think I've made it to the point

but don't try to fix me

I swear it's too late

the shadows were telling me tales

the tales were told by dead friends

maybe I'll meet them in that endless land

not now not today cuz I've closed my eyes

......now I am dreaming

but plz don't try to fix me

it will hurt soo bad ....(I swear it will )

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  • 12 years ago

    by rock serenade

    Thanks ...:)

  • 12 years ago

    by ArtistrySoul

    Very creative piece :0), but it must of taken some time to write this poem to make the entire flow, Good Job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Okay, I promised you my comment. Sorry it's a bit delayed :)
    As song lyrics, this is great. To a certain beat or tune, it would work really well. Just a little polishing would make this better:

    'If I take all my sorrow and trow it in the
    ocean'
    typo: throw

    'I am such a violon without strings
    yeah that kind of violon'
    typo on violin. 'Such' is an adjective. Replace it with 'like' or eradicate it completely, either way it'd flow much better.

    'I am such one in a million'
    Again, 'such' is unnecessary here, so it'd be best to take it off.

    'I feel surounded by all my fears
    and I realy wanna see all of my dears'
    '...all of my dears' seem off. How about revising this and using tears instead? That way, it'd be more coherent and the rhyme would still be there.

    Overall, I really like it. The title was well-chosen, and it fits. Well done :)
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Matthew Anthony

    Really beautiful - If I drop a tear on your guitar

    it will only play sads songs

    so don't ask me if I am alright

    you know I am not

    don't try to fix me

    I swear it's too late ...

    Loved every second x

  • 12 years ago

    by hayet serenade

    WAW WAW WAW AWESOME
    AND IM NOT FINE TOO ILOVE IT CARRY ON

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