Comments : Tattoo To Be

  • 12 years ago

    by Silent Girl

    Amazing poem :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    I'd like to make a few suggestions before I tell you what I like: First of all I wouldn't capitalize the letter of every new beginning verse, I used to do that to, but learnt that it's slightly distracting. Also I'd recommend you to add some punctuation because that might help the flow better and the understanding too.

    I think that the message of this poem is really powerful. I think a tattoo can be like a poem, just that the tattoo is an image while a poem contains words, but captivate a memory or something we'd like to remember and nobody will understand it's very original meaning but ourself, as we picked or wrote it.

    I also like how you're directly speaking to a person at the end of your poem, it makes it more personal and it emphasizes how sincere you are.

  • 12 years ago

    by La Reina De Corazones

    Awwww that's sad and that's also true and my sister is rite on the end of her comment lol my sister is Jeni lol btw and honestly sweety this poem is beautiful

  • 12 years ago

    by ArtistrySoul

    Good poem, but it did need to flow fluently in some areas of your poem to hold the readers attention, other than that good attempt :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Very powerful message you are bringing
    across
    5/5