Hello

This is the most heart ripping piece I have come upon so far, and my, my heart is literally crumpled and my eyes are warm with some tears. Peter, okay, now I really believe romance is in your bones...It will take me hours to recover from this piece! Huhuhu. This is epic.

Peter, I really shouldn't have read this right now lol it had me in bits. The pace, the stuttering of the lines, the pauses , the flow.. All just WOW!!

Take care,
Em

Great ending Peter, I liked how the stuttering pace worked for this and really set the tone.
The layout is very brave.
What you have done well is the rhyming (which we would expect from you) but more importantly you can almost hear a returning conversation.
You can also feel the raw emotion, the disappointment in your voice as it almost stammers.
Reading again What I actually liked best was the clever use of the question mark at the very start after 'hello'
this really set the tone for the whole poem.
Great Job.

Really great poem, rhyming so well and brings such a clear sad and lonely and so well known message, just really... love it! I wish you all the best and take care there and keep on writing since you are great at it!

The dots were a distraction, but I understand you needed to make a format to make clear it is a conversation.

Very sad tale, I dislike when people humiliate themselves by begging, maybe because it is something that I have done at times as well. It never worked, quite the opposite, actually;)

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid