Musical death

by Subject Unknown   May 29, 2012


I'm about to compose my suicidal symphony.
The eyes of my ghosts gaze grudgingly into me.
Keep tempo, if you please.
Alas you cannot, you've begun to seize.
Now stumbling around the empty stage,
end this life and turn the page.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Just A Stupid Girl

    A lot of times repeating words is a good thing. it helps to get the point threw. you did a great job it was just short. i think that you have a lot of potential as a poet (:

  • 12 years ago

    by Just A Stupid Girl

    It is extramly good. i loved that you mixed music and suicide. two of my favorite things to read about. i would have liked it more if it was a little longer and you discribed a few more things. but all in all very good job. (:

    • 12 years ago

      by Subject Unknown

      Yeah, I really need to work on writing lengthy poems. I always have trouble with making them sound right and repeating words too much.

  • 12 years ago

    by Subject Unknown

    Thank you, I tried to mix my love of music and my suicidal feelings :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Kate

    Eerie yet good. It reminds me of my old band teacher. The last two lines are my favorite part. Good job

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