Your Gift

Great piece

I think the title is well chosen as it indicates you're directing your poem at a specific person, which makes your words more realistic and I'm also glad to see that you capitalized both words. I think that emphasizes it being the title more.

May I make a few suggestions, I'll leave your poem the way it is, just change the punctuation a bit because the way it's now, it'd be one sentence, which I do not think it actually is:

Promises that won't last
and memories that wont fade.
Love that would never part
and kisses that won't taste.
Words which would pierce
and care that would hurt.
Happiness that would cry,
that's what you brought,
in my life. -> I'd say that it is better like this :) Just a suggestion though and I'd probably change the "in" to "into"

I did not expect this poem to turn out negative as getting a gift is usually a good thing, but I like that twist because of it not being usual. It also did not feel as though you'd say these words with a lot of hatred, which one could probably understand if that is really what that person caused the persona to feel, but oh well.

Overall I think this is an interesting poem, which needs a bit of editing, but the potential is there. :)

Short but sweet a very warm and cute poem

Well done

Tony

I really love it cause it can help me to tell my besdie how i feel bout him
luv youh very much cryingheart

Haha sry fr avin such person in ua life op evrything wil change ..thats a beautiful piece..greatly done.