Hmm I think this was good
Just as simple as that
You used simple words
Short poem it holds much emotion and it was cool xD
Well written in my opinion
5/5 keep writing =)

I think this sounds just like a verse in a song its really good, simple, full of emotion, and flows 5/5

This was good. It was nice and straight forward, any girl would love it and it has good qualities when it comes to trying to make it a song.