Okay, I liked this piece, the imagery was okay, maybe could have been more vivid to add to the story and the darkness...

I felt like you used little punctuation and just too many capitals to emphasise words...

But saying that...It was a good piece

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The only thing I see wrong with this is a couple typos civalsation should be "civilization" and realises should be "realized" ... other than that, i really like the concept of this poem, it's unique, something I haven't read yet.

Great job. 5/5