Wow this is an amazing piece. The style is interesting, it is definiatly unique and your voice is really clear. I love your descriptions, they were absolutely wonderful in creating very vivid images. The emotion was completely there as was your failing happiness in this place.

I think that the title would be better if it were just Horror House, but if you like it as is, than that is all that matters. Also there are some places that I believe your word choice could have been stronger.

Otherwise, it is perfect. It grips the reader and it tells a lot. I knew that I enjoyed your work and though you only have two pieces at the moment this is by far my favorite and this is going in my favorites list.

I look forward to reading more of your work.

5/5

~MRK

Very relatable. Nice job. I know what this feels like and I think this is something most teenagers would deffinatly be more likely to write.