Thomas i like this alot, these types of pieces can either be hammered out or flow out and this one flowed...really well...love the twist at the end ...you pull the reader right in with this one dude well done! 5/5

Nice ending Again !!
love the twist in the end
and I like you simple style alot
for the poem lol
It is pretty the idea is just fantastic xD
5/5 keep writing =)

Thomas, this is one of the best love poems
I have read in awhile. I did like the flow
well rhyming not to mention the twist at
the end
excellent

This is awesome! the twist at the end makes the whole poem! at first i was like yeah he's going to announce it at the end that he loves her... totally shocked me. 5/5

I love the ending. it makes me think hahha. I like this poem anyway