Comments : Memoir of a Locust

  • 12 years ago

    by Thomas

    Very deep poem.

    Writing is THE way to make life more bearable so keep doing it :)

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Oh syrup...sighs.....the thing about maple trees is that they can withstand the strongest of storms, unlike some other trees, even when a branch breaks new shoots appear almost instantly making her stronger than ever before. my friend. .......your branches are strong, as strong as your write. And your words will ALWAYS be heard x x

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I love how you wrote from a locust's perspective and connected it with being a poet.
    A locust can't stop chirping or 'making songs', just as a poet can't stop writing.
    Really creative. Keep writing (:
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Wow its strong, Im so in love with this poem:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    Wow.your poem is alive xD
    It is amazing
    I love this alot
    Specially this part
    "I reside to write my words
    alone in silence of the dawn
    release the pain within my soul
    learning the truth when I'm gone."
    Fantastic lol
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Beautiful poem. Makes me want to cry from the pain that I feel from reading these words. Very beautiful.

    I don't know if this is what you meant, but when I read this poem I think of someone who has nothing left except one thing, which in this poem it seems to be poetry. No one really listens to you, except through you poetry-screaming doesn't work, talking doesn't work, nothing works besides poetry. And sometimes that doesn't even work.

    "It isn't enough to say I'm broken
    as these shoulders carry more than I can bare
    it seems my destiny is to be seen and not heard
    so I'll simply smile and stare."

    ^I consider this my favorite part of the whole poem because it reminds me so much of myself. You carry so many memories, secrets, and everything on your shoulders but no one will listen to you.

    In this poem, it almost seems like you have thought about giving up, but you keep on going forward.

    Very beautiful
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Hun I love this poem, the rhyming is beautiful but the words were so sad.

    I am wondering if someone is telling you not to write? I mean who would want that from you hun? You are amazing and so talented. I love reading your work. I know that writing is a way to release things and since you feel that your shoulders are carrying a heavy burden you should be able to write to express yourself and release some of it.

    This poem broke my heart but I still love it of course.

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    So much sadness, but yet so much strength as a writer in the words you have penned.

    You indeed have allot to offer to all of us as a talented writer. We all go through different phases and I am just begining to get over a very long dry writing spell.

    Never give up.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I'm sorry, Keep writing.

    I do love reading your pieces, it doesn't matter if I feel sad or happy, or silly, or crazy... or loopy.. or idk.. your writing is magic.. it transmits it to the reader and I get in awe when I feel the pain or happiness, or any emotion intended within any poem. That just means that it's that good.

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    Amazing piece, sista.