Asleep.

by Rebecca Bentley   Jun 6, 2012


Tonight, I had a dream.
But that to me is nothing new.
Because I dreamed about you yesterday, and the day before that too.
Your eyes are what I focus on,
And every night I do the same.
I compare them to the photo, that is placed inside my silver frame.
It's got your footprints on it,
Like its pressed across the glass.
Like you walked right upto heaven,
Without a second glance.
That photo looks so peacefull,
Like you are blissfully asleep.
I wonder if you dream of me,
Just like I dream of you.
Beautiful eyes, awake,
And all the things we didn't do.
Dreaming makes me happy until I have to wake.
Because the only time I see you then,
Is to plant flowers at your grave.
Tonight I had a dream,
But that to me is nothing new,
Because I dreamed about you yesterday,
And the day before that to.
Your eyes are what I focused on,
But I woke up with a sigh.
I never got to see them shine.
You didn't open them, until you reached the sky.

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  • 11 years ago

    by lillie

    Wow very beautifully written, I got goosebumps reading this no joke.. I know how you feel it reminded me of a good friend who passed and all i have is a pic of us together, one picture, this poem made me tear up 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Very touching Becca, we all live in this "Veil of tears" called the world.

    Good work, 5/5

    Ken

  • 12 years ago

    by LostWords

    Wow, no words describe this pain. I'm sorry for the loss of your child doesn't even seem enough. You write such powerful words.
    I relate to the pain in this poem only from second hand. I cannot even begin to imagine how truly painful that would be.

    I loved the repetition in this as well.

    Your work is always incredible.

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    * upto is two words up to.
    * peaceful only has one L

    I loved this poem, I liked the continuous flow fromt he start to the end and how each line flowed into the next.

    The loss in this poem, I can relate to, and I think you have penned it so movingly and so true. I understand the pain and I adored the way you described how in your dreams you get to be with your baby so you want to stay asleep to stay with him. Then the unbarable pain of waking up knowing that it was all a dream again.

    The repetition worked relaly well and was actually the bit that gripped my heart the most.

    As for your title, at first I thought it was asleep because you were talking about him being peacefully at sleep now, but on second thoughts it could also be because when you are asleep this is what you dream of and where you feel close to him. So I like your choice as it fits perfectly to the poem.

    Thanks for sharing this, I relate to every word and think you have bravely penned this tough situation and loss.

    Keep writing.

  • 12 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Another beautiful but sad poem from this very talented Writer. I enjoyed reading this.
    Keep writing!

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