Broken Into

You really captured the struggle after a break-up. You feel the pain coming and going. Then you wonder if the other person is also hurting or even thinking of you.

Very nice, keep on writing.

5/5

Typos: In the second stanza, I don't know if window ceils is an actual thing (it might be). However, I was thinking that you might have meant windowsills. You might not have been, but I was just bringing it up just in case you were :)

This is a very good poem. You have feeling in here-a lot of feeling.

"Head nodding off in pain,
Feeling washing over me the same emotions again.
Sadness, emptiness, and hurt,
Damn it feels like the end this couldn't get any worse"

^I don't know because I am not a grammar expert, but I believe that there should be something in between "Damn it feels like the end" and "this couldn't get any worse." Maybe a comma or a semicolon. I can see the emotion in here-sadness, emptiness, and hurt-and the imagery (head nodding off in pain). Other than that little problem, it is a perfect stanza.

"Sometimes I catch myself stuck in a ponder,
Sometimes I stop, think and wonder,
If the rain falls because it feels as I do
And if stars shoot across night skies because they're broken to."

^This one has to be my favorite stanza of this poem :) I love it. I love it because of the way you thought of the rain and the stars. Makes me wonder too sometimes ;)

Excellent poem besides those little errors. Hope you do good :)
5/5

Beautifully written...I love not only the array of emotions that are flowing here, but all the questions you bring out. You're not sure what to think anymore because of the pain and that sense of confusion and hurt is very evident here. Simple rhyming and flow, your descriptions were powerful though.

Keep writing :]