Comments : Forbidden Fantasy

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Reminds me of a forbidden fruit
    feeling rather ashamed and somewhat guilty
    I do love this poem, quite remarkable
    excellent penned Hannah

  • 12 years ago

    by Thomas

    Nicely written piece.

    You depict very well the struggle people feel when they desire someone but can't be with.
    There is always the question if the person feels the same as well.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    All of the poems had something that made me love them.

    I love the questions that you asked within this piece, I found each of them provoking.

    "Do small things trigger a thought of me? Does the taste of succulent strawberries remind you of my lips?"

    ^ this questions, so simple yet so provoking.

    You invaded my heart,
    Questions start bombing my thoughts,
    I wonder if you are in this war, too?

    ---Then the last question, I wonder if you are in this war, too?
    I love that you are wondering if he is also wondering about you.

    I found the tone of the poem, dreamy but also calm. and that's what I love about it.

    Though this made me laugh a bit.
    "and even the slight stubble on my unshaven legs reminds
    me of your five o'clock shadow."

    ---I was not expecting to read unshaven legs or shave legs in a poem. lol

    Overall, I enjoyed the read, thank you for participating and sharing your thoughts. too.

  • The imagery was just perfect.
    Fantastic use of words and nice arrangement too.

    This is a absolutely stunning piece.

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    So much deep longing written into this write.
    It is nicely entwined with such lovely images of the past with your lover and questions whether
    they still have the same memories and thoughts.

    Excellent Hannah!

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Straight into my favs ... That was a truly remarkable write gave me goose bumps ... your word choice was perfect could not fault it flawless

    beautiful write

  • 12 years ago

    by Alanis

    Wonderful and exciting! No flaws and perfect in every
    way.

    Excellent.

  • 12 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    I really like this . it makes me think of the person i have a crush on