Comments : To my Unborn child Brooklynn Marie Barton<3

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    There is no greater hurt than losing a child
    I am so sorry for your loss

  • 12 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Heartbreaking. I agree with Dagmar, there is nothing worse than losing a child. I am also sorry for you loss.

    Excellent
    5/5

    • 12 years ago

      by Hailey Popham

      Thank you. so much i dont usually tell anyone but i guess i felt this was a safe place.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    Actually I do not want to make any suggestions about how to improve this poem, because I know how heartfelt and real this is and it is beautiful for you releasing your feelings, but I think that by suggesting ways to improve it will just get better as it won't take the essence and preciousness of this poem nonetheless.

    You only have a few spelling mistakes that I'd recommend you to change:
    You were wrapped in my arms tight,
    nothing could have hurt you so bad,
    but then you couldn't make it as long,
    now me and your dad are lost,
    we can't find our way,
    to be by your side again,
    but know that we love you,
    and you will always be our little girl!<3
    ^ Just added a few apostrophs and removed the spelling mistake.

    I am sorry about your loss.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jon

    Ya it was ours, and it was hard but we are getting through it