Very strong and emotive,
A real sense of helplessness,

I always like to critique a poem if you don't mind, You can ignore suggestions if you want to.

Firstly I have added commas and full stops.

My eyes were pleading,
for something to grab onto,
just one word to hang on,
as I started to fade.
I feel so defeated;
but you like that don't you?
Now even the pains gone,
and I'm floating away.

The knife that you stabbed,
in the back of my mind,
killing all of my thoughts
losing all sense of time.
Now it's not sharp enough,
to pierce through to the lies,
that you shoved down my throat,
as you gauged out my eyes.
Now I won't get to see,
what you're doing to me,
as you talk with your fists,
and you lie through your teeth!
You smirk as your hand,
closes tight on my throat,
squeezing just hard enough,
that I feel myself choke.

I put the ! after teeth to stress the anger and hatred you have for this man.

Like I said, just suggestions, it's your poem.

regards
Darren

That's horrible to go through. Loved it :)

Whoa, nobody should never go thourgh that.
I'm sorry. But overall this poem was great :)

Wow, I was intrigued by the first stanza, but the second blew me away. It really caught me off guard because i didn't expect the imagery to be so clear or your metaphors to be so grim. I really enjoyed it! Keep it up!