The Flame Burn For You

by Emilia   Jun 28, 2004


You will still be in my heart
I didn't know that anything could tare us apart
It was like a dream come true
the day I first met you
My heart was full of gladness but soon it was turning into pain
What had happened to the burning flame?

The flame that should burn through all rain
The flame that should burning in our hearts forever
and take away all the pain
The time spin fast, lies wont last
The sky turns black, never blue
A while from now we will be through

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  • 19 years ago

    by hussain

    very ncie poem....well written you have talent keep on writing

  • 20 years ago

    by UM

    A couple spelling errors, but a very good poem. The repeated flame metaphor was powerful. Check out mine if you have teh chance.

  • 20 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Hey I liked this poem, and I especially liked the repeated metaphor of the flame. There are a few errors you should fix of you have the time though. As Aken Sol said above, tear is spelled incorrectly. On lines 7 and 12, it should be "through", not "though". On line 8 I think you meant to say burn, because burning just doesn't seem like the right tense to me, try reading it out loud. I thought the rhyming was well done; it was casual and it flowed well. Good work!

  • 20 years ago

    by Aken Sol

    Very nice poem, and a really creative name you got there. Besides the spelling error ("tear" instead of "tare"), the poem was excellent.
    Aken Sol

  • 20 years ago

    by insane authority

    hey nice poems i like the way u used the burning flame!! created an image lol and feeling.
    o ya n thanks for reading mi poem too:)

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