Farewell

Peter, I feel a little silly for liking this but it was a beautifully written yet raw piece and I bet if Rebecca got to read this she would have been happy that she had people like you Ro help her through the difficult time. I can relate fo this as I lost a baby boy (I had just found 2 weeks previous he was going to be a boy) due to domestic violence.
Take care and never stop writing, you're words are always emotional and flow perfectly.

Peter what a beautiful poem, so much emotion put into the poem.
I could almost picture the pain of a parent losing one of their children
My condolences go out to Rebecca xoxxo

Beautiful yet sad :)

"Farewell my babe, now I must mourn
I weep and grieve 'cause you weren't born
In Hospital on that sad day
They came with God, took you, away
I had such dreams for you and me
I wanted you to grow and 'be'
But God took you for Him to keep
and now I grieve, and cry, and weep"

The flow in this stanza is great and it goes together well. I can really feel the powerful of greiving in the beginning.

"Were you a boy with eyes so blue?
If only a picture, I had of you
A girl with soft and fairest hair?
For me to hold, in arms, 'be there?'"

This part is so sad, and the emotion. This stanza has really stuck me because I've been in this situation before...

"
I cry, you'll never grow in me
You've gone away, eternity
I'm left alone with just my dreams
I'm lost in thoughts, 'what might of been..'"

Again I relate to this. The flow is continous, the way you write this situation out onto a single piece of paper is amazing. I couldn't put it better.

"But what I need to say to you
My boy or girl with eyes so blue

'My Darling child, I DID love you ...'"

I feel that the ending of this poem, was a bit forced and it kind of dropped off. This is still a great write though! Great job, brilliant.

Again another brilliant poem. SOmething I can relate to. I had a stillborn baby due to domestic abuse. I've also had 2 miscarriages. What a beautiful poem. It brought a tear to my eye.